#Double Etheree – Payback Time


Payback Time

failed potion
outside her tree
Crazed incantation
Setting fire ablaze
About to taste sweet revenge
on the fling who betrayed her trust
He unlocked her chest and stole her things
Freely broke her heart into smithereens
Her pet owl’s eyes are gaping in concern
Tree spirits are materializing
Raven hair dancing in delight
Caged monster stares at the pot
Gripping tightly, he gulps
The goblet of blood
is within reach
Magic books

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  1. Hélène Vaillant says:

    Absolutely beautiful. Your created a vivid image through the whole Etheree poem. Thank you for participating. I love the spirit of your tale too. Fitting for the mood of the picture.

    1. theresaly520 says:

      Thank you, Helene! You picked an interesting photo to write a story about!😄

      1. Hélène Vaillant says:

        Thank you for joining in.

  2. Fabulous story and imagery. I could see and feel your witch! Well done. How you managed to fit in all those challenges. WOW! ❤

    1. theresaly520 says:

      Thank you, Colleen! The etheree was such a fun poetry structure which taught me how to be creatively concise! 😄

  3. iidorun says:

    Impressive use of the double ethereal form and all the prompts! Your words bring to life the possible story of the image. Really wonderful work!

    1. theresaly520 says:

      Thank you! It’s my first time using this poetry form! I was feeling really inspired though. I love writing stories!😄

      1. iidorun says:

        Inspiration at its best. Really well done!

  4. First thing to take away here: do not mess with a witch.

    Now that I have that out of the way: I loved the visual aspects of this. It compliments the atmosphere well, in fact, this is a full scene: background music, cauldron boiling, shadows on the walls, energies discharging, the witch’s wrath pouring out of her and into the spell she is weaving. Both the anger and the passion with which it is felt come through very clearly. Superb work, expertly written.

    1. theresaly520 says:

      Yes, dating a powerful witch is not for the faint of heart. 😄 Best treat them with respect. Thank you for your descriptive review. I appreciate your feedback, and I’m glad you enjoyed the tale!

      1. It was my pleasure, truly. I loved the poem! 🙂

  5. Bernie Delaney says:

    Excellent poem, full of wonderful imagery and great story telling too.

    1. theresaly520 says:

      Thank you! It’s a fun poetic form. I do love telling stories, so I’m glad you enjoyed it!

  6. Love the magical vibes!😁 Perfect warm up for Halloween.😉

    1. theresaly520 says:

      Happy Halloween Jenna!

      1. The you, happy Halloween!😊

  7. InspiresN says:

    wonderful poem and great story in it!

    1. theresaly520 says:

      Thank you! Her story felt very real to me as I wrote the story!☺

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